No.991
Well, to tell you the truth, the beginning had me enticed. I say that it could be a good comic. However, there are a few things that do irritate me, and if I understand you right, you're sort of looking of a critique, so heres my opinion.
One of the things that isn't very strong is the format. It seemed like a picture book because the panels weren't juxtaposed in a way that made much sense reading it. I couldn't tell at first if I was supposed to read it left to right or right to left. Part of it was because the story was so random and that the narrative had their own panels.
By the way, if you want, you can post them in my thread where Im asking people if they make comics and have ideas.
No.993
>>991also, the grammar made me feel uneasy. I understand that some of it was on purpose, and that, I do not mind because it helps to strengthen "character development" for lack of a better word…. Like how the kid's words often end with an 'S', and its really cute. But there were some things that were unintentional, or things that i didnt know whether or not they were… like the spelling of "sing/sign".
And again I'd recommend posting the images in the homemade comic thread. "Ill show you mine if you show me yours".
No.996
It doesn't make any sense yet and I can't tell if it ever will
why lined paper
the characters arr rook same
