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Seemed more like an animated vlog than a comedy skit, but the style was pretty neat. Like a greentext story, but with pictures. You should try doing some other videos like this, only add more illustrations, maybe throw in some background music and see how it turns out. For a start, you might find something to do a rant about—YouTube loves rants, especially when accompanied by funny pictures. Here's an example of what I mean:

http://youtu.be/nTtn9ucxpac

Hmm yeah I'll definitely try to include more illustrations and "animations" once I practice a bit more and get it smoother. Ranting is also a really good idea, thanks for the feedback!

You have the right voice for this stuff. That's the most important thing. Other than that it is like 11355 said a vlog.
But don't do a rant or anything on those lines…. The Internet cries around enough already.
Get creative. Get ridicules. The scene with the lamborghini suggests that you want dark humour. A character that tries very hard to fit in but fails horribly. Without a punchline but with a context of shame and disbelief about the actions of the character. You could be able to draw the attention to some important subjects like Social anxiety disorder or other subjects regarding fitting in with society.

I was actually worrying about whether or not my voice was fit for this kind of thing, thanks for the reassurance haha. And yeah, I'm not really an angry person so I might have a hard time ranting anyways. But yeah I'll definitely be experimenting to see what I can make:)

If you're going to use such low-content drawings, you need more. Or increase the content. More lines, more colors, more objects, anything. I got mini-bored every few seconds. It's like reading a book with three words on each page; the amount of stuff on each page is almost not worth it to turn each page.
Maybe cut the story down a little, speak more quickly - it's not a very complex idea you're transmitting, and it felt padded.
For instance, "I don't know if I'm going to go to my highschool reunion, but" was really unnecessary. It doesn't add anything to the Lamborghini/beer bottle joke it preceded, and it took away from the funny "…or I just won't go." bit like a lame preview takes away from a good movie.
Anywho. 4/10 funny, I was amused but didn't laugh.
I'm used to more intense comedy, though. If you're happy with this level of calm, ignore my post lol.

>>11386
>you need more
And by that I mean anything from the squiggly line bullshit in Home Movies to actual animation.