I'll write down notes about what will happen in the story tonight (quitting education, finding job, moving out into tiny apartment, slowly cutting off contact etc.) Is it a bad idea if I plan chapter for chapter? Would that lead to a more scheduled book? Should I keep it dynamic with different things coming up at the same time (without it being too much because that would irritating to read) A scheduled approach would lead to a very episodic story. I'll have to think.>>768>I think it can only work if the guy already had a life to speak of.
It will start with him right after reaching the conclusion to pursue this passive life. Before that he was what one would consider "normal" or healthy (education, friends, family, etc.) but maybe he should be a bit on the shy/anxious side of things? Maybe only make up that image of confidence and health out of fear? I'll have to work this out further.
>It would also be preferable if the actual reason for why the guy want's this, or the catalyst for it, was at least hinted at.
That's kinda hard, I have to admit. I initially planned that there shouldn't be a specific reason or event. Just his anxiety reaching a point where he can't deal with living anymore.
I'll have to rethink this too.
Thank you for your advice!>>769>What can we, the audience, learn from this?
That's quite a good question. I have no idea. I should think of that as well.
Spontaneously I'd say it tries to highlight how terrifying life can be to people to the point where they would rather not experience it.
Thank you for your advice too!
As for your story:
I like it. It sounds very eerie but as >>772
said, there's some stuff that isn't explained.I would work well as something absurd but I'm not sure if that is what you intented.
You don't need to explain every single thing, just the biggest offenders.
How did they survive in the dome when they were kids? How do the bugs look over the kids in the dome? Like a god looking down or with security cameras like in Truman Show?
How are they humans if the others are bugs? Did the bugs have children while they were still human?
You could involve parents that disappear when the kids are growing up (in order to hide their transformation)
Again, I'm trying to put logic into a story that might not need it. You could turn it into a surreal story that neither asks nor answers questions where it is not required for th reader to get it in order to appreciate it (which would be very difficult and might require you to change your setting a bit.)
Think of Kafka. He paints a picture that seems to look different everytime you think you figured something out, without actually changing. Again, that's damn hard to accomplish.
Also it would probably do more good if it's on the shorter side. With a long adventure the points above could hinder you/make the reader aware of them.
I hope what I said makes sense.